Whether you self-publish or search for an agent you still need the blurb, I‘m slowly getting better tips about sending a query to a literary agent and the best tip is to consider your back page blurb as your central pitch. This is a long version of the blurb, on top and the shorter one is on the bottom:

Ghosts possess a dwarf after she samples a genetic memory drug; Alice belongs to the Cabeiri, a fertility cult of ancient origin; they brew the drug. The ghosts, weave into Alice’s personality and she’ll become the Al Capone of the sex industry. Al directs movies to market the vibes she designs. Talent agencies act as recruiting ground for the cult. Battles for power, within the cult, favor Capone’s mob war.

The first ghost is ill-fit for a dwarf but the Emperor/gladiator Commodus will give Alice a taste for blood. Other ghosts will come. The Sackvilles drive her lust while Pope Benedict IX steers her into perversity. Tycho Brahe comes in for laughs. Queen Catherine and Margo Medici, offer Machiavellian wit and a Mother-Daughter split. Efa Nia, a daughter of a dwarf conquistador who truly came with Pedro Menendez, tries to make peace. The Cabeiri is a carny cult; a girlie and freak show cult. Gibsonton became their home when Ringling wintered in Florida. The Fountain of Youth is instead, The Fountain of Long Memories.

Shorter revision:

Ghosts possess a dwarf after she samples the Cabeiri cult’s genetic memory drug. The ghosts, weave into Alice’s personality and she’ll become the Al Capone of the sex industry. Al directs movies to market the vibes she designs. Talent agencies act as recruiting ground for the cult. Battles for power, within the cult, favor Capone’s mob war. The first ghost is ill-fit for a dwarf but the Emperor/gladiator Commodus will give Alice a taste for blood. Other ghosts come to threaten her sanity. Alice hopes one ghost, Efa Nia, a daughter of a dwarf conquistador who truly came with Pedro Menendez will come to her aid.. All praise Baubo and– the dWARf.

I can’t get everything interesting about my novel in less than 150-words, but the bottom one gets many elements and totals to 112-words. I have room for two more sentences, but I’ll need to think about what I wish to add or change. I may need to get rid of the word truly, but it the word highlights an interesting piece of trivia.

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